The Novels I Am Writing.
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Just so I remember in the morning. Anyways these are some thoughts for me to me but some first paragraph excerpts from stuff I'm sort of working on / on the back burner...
.Through The River.
The first 5 chapters of Through the River are absolutely hysterical. You lose it after that. Go back, rethink, rework, rewrite. What ever happened to the rabbit that started this all. Tacura Yellpin III. That's 150 pages too many to lose. Get rid of the love aspects or at least make them way way way more subtle. Rework the yellow-girl. Actually evil people are over-rated.
Give me a fairy tale with a multi-dimensional villain. That would be out and out revolutionary. Better yet, give me a fairy-tale where the boys need saving. That would be feminist. Better yet, give me a fairy-tale that doesn't start with Once Upon A Time. That would be a miracle. Better yet, give me a fairy-tale that doesn't end Happily-Ever-After. That would be shocking. Better yet, give me a fairy-tale where someone walks away unhappy. That would be realistic. Better yet, give me a fairy-tale where everything isn't neatly resolved at the end works out in the end. That would be life-like.
Oh wait. Isn't that what you've already done. Genius.
Go back to your old voice. Go back to Kate, the little girl. Why should she have to grow up?
.The Shortcut to the Northwind.
Oh dear. What ever happened to Hazel and Andrew. Space pilots of the best kind. What ever happened to the holes in the skies that you could fly yourself into if you knew the right angle. Second star to the right. Whatever happened to all the wars brewing. Whatever happened to Mikan. And the emo plot-line that was fun to write as a twelve year old and still fun to read as a nineteen year old. That's another 120 pages for you.
Kali and William. It wasn't much of anything, but it's better than a blank page. So you don't know about the music industry or tourring or any of that stuff. The dialogue was pretty amusing. The laughter, definitely real. Television Script? That's at least 90 pages of pure dialogie. That's at least 5 episodes. Obviously, aimed at girls.
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And what about this new novel. This new character. The voice is so incredibily raw. Don't you want to put your ear to the stereo and see what he has to say? So when are you going to make some time to listen. Because it isn't every character that comes walking, talking out of your pen saying things like this one. It isn't every character that says, here I am, come meet me as you are. And it isn't every character you meet wandering out of your pen that declares things so unashamedly. And maybe he doesn't know where he's going, maybe he only knows where he's been. But he'll take you there if you have the time to listen. You may not know all of the story, but some of it's already reverberating in your heartsong so hurry up and listen before the next track starts playing. And it isn't every heart that can see the pain, but you can, so you'll listen. Cause someone out there needs this story.
And then your favorites. Where are Elairah and Rynn? You haven't seen much of them. Enchantment Reawakened. Where are West and Anders? So what, the ending of the script got rushed and should have lasted another fifty pages, but it was never a movie script to begin with. When are you going to take the time to flesh out the faces that you've come to love and turn that into a novel. Because the story-line may have had a big gaping hole, but other than that it was really really solid. It was really really fun. Actual conversations.
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.Through The River.
The first 5 chapters of Through the River are absolutely hysterical. You lose it after that. Go back, rethink, rework, rewrite. What ever happened to the rabbit that started this all. Tacura Yellpin III. That's 150 pages too many to lose. Get rid of the love aspects or at least make them way way way more subtle. Rework the yellow-girl. Actually evil people are over-rated.
Give me a fairy tale with a multi-dimensional villain. That would be out and out revolutionary. Better yet, give me a fairy-tale where the boys need saving. That would be feminist. Better yet, give me a fairy-tale that doesn't start with Once Upon A Time. That would be a miracle. Better yet, give me a fairy-tale that doesn't end Happily-Ever-After. That would be shocking. Better yet, give me a fairy-tale where someone walks away unhappy. That would be realistic. Better yet, give me a fairy-tale where everything isn't neatly resolved at the end works out in the end. That would be life-like.
Oh wait. Isn't that what you've already done. Genius.
Go back to your old voice. Go back to Kate, the little girl. Why should she have to grow up?
Kate had fallen through the river. Not fallen into the river and was all wet, or anything as seemingly possible as that, but rather something much more absurd and ludicrous. You see, Kate had been running through the forest, fleeing her pursuers, and had tripped. The root over which she fell sent her careening several feet upon which she should have fallen into the river.
.The Shortcut to the Northwind.
Oh dear. What ever happened to Hazel and Andrew. Space pilots of the best kind. What ever happened to the holes in the skies that you could fly yourself into if you knew the right angle. Second star to the right. Whatever happened to all the wars brewing. Whatever happened to Mikan. And the emo plot-line that was fun to write as a twelve year old and still fun to read as a nineteen year old. That's another 120 pages for you.
Some people say that stars are holes in Heaven’s floor. While others say that they’re balls of fire. Yet others still insist that they are people imprisoned within the sky waiting for an eternity to end. But stars are neither holes, nor fire, nor prisoners; they are the shortcut to the Northwind, and very few have ever traveled there..Rock.
Kali and William. It wasn't much of anything, but it's better than a blank page. So you don't know about the music industry or tourring or any of that stuff. The dialogue was pretty amusing. The laughter, definitely real. Television Script? That's at least 90 pages of pure dialogie. That's at least 5 episodes. Obviously, aimed at girls.
Kali: You called my house and talked to my mom?
William: I couldn’t just show up
Kali: You’re such a mama’s boy
William: You find it cute.
Kali: And charming.
William: Yes. I am Prince Charming.
Kali: No, Prince William.
William: That position is already taken by some guy in England
Kali: so is Prince Charming
William: By who?
Kali: that guy in Cinderella
William: that was his actual name? I always thought it was figurative
Kali: It was his name
William: Interesting.
Kali: I suppose you could share the position with him.
Kali: What is it?
William: I’m thinking up a proposition
Kali: which is?
William: I will be your Prince Charming, if you will be my Cinderella
Kali: I would love to if –
William: – if what?
Kali: If I can forgo that whole evil stepsister thing
William: I suppose we can arrange a deal. I am a prince after all.
Kali: doesn’t that make me a princess?
William: Not until we get married.
Kali: GROSS. NO WAY.
.?????.
And what about this new novel. This new character. The voice is so incredibily raw. Don't you want to put your ear to the stereo and see what he has to say? So when are you going to make some time to listen. Because it isn't every character that comes walking, talking out of your pen saying things like this one. It isn't every character that says, here I am, come meet me as you are. And it isn't every character you meet wandering out of your pen that declares things so unashamedly. And maybe he doesn't know where he's going, maybe he only knows where he's been. But he'll take you there if you have the time to listen. You may not know all of the story, but some of it's already reverberating in your heartsong so hurry up and listen before the next track starts playing. And it isn't every heart that can see the pain, but you can, so you'll listen. Cause someone out there needs this story.
.Enchantment Reawakened.I think that if someone were to kill me, I wouldn’t hate them. It’s not that I want to die - that’s not it at all. I’m quite happy being alive. What I mean is I wouldn’t be sitting up there in Heaven going Hey God, come on now, how about striking him down already. I think I’d be doing the opposite, you know? Like asking God to forgive the guy and asking Him to help the guy find his way in life. Maybe I could even be this person’s guardian angel. Maybe he killed me just so someone in the afterlife would care about him, even if he thought it’d be in a negative way. You know it’s funny, I keep thinking he and keeping writing he but what if it’s a her? What if a she kills me? And what if we could have all just been friends?
And then your favorites. Where are Elairah and Rynn? You haven't seen much of them. Enchantment Reawakened. Where are West and Anders? So what, the ending of the script got rushed and should have lasted another fifty pages, but it was never a movie script to begin with. When are you going to take the time to flesh out the faces that you've come to love and turn that into a novel. Because the story-line may have had a big gaping hole, but other than that it was really really solid. It was really really fun. Actual conversations.
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Anyways, let me know what you think of each. I don't know what's sad, the fact that all except one have over 90 pages of work put into them or the fact that this isn't all I've written.
Anyways.
Sleep on it.
Please post some comments.
Anyways.
Sleep on it.
Please post some comments.
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